Today more people are overweight than before.what in your opinion are the primary cause of this? What are the main effect of this epidemic?
Nowadays, it has been noticed by summer
individual
that people now weigh more than they use to. Fix the agreement mistake
individuals
This
is largely due to
their inactive life style
and Correct your spelling
lifestyle
over consumption
of processed foods which had increased the rate of morbidity and mortality. Correct your spelling
overconsumption
This
essay will explain these with relevant examples and a logical conclusion Will be drawn.
On the one hand, firstly
, the recent attitudes of individual
who prefer not to work, always Fix the agreement mistake
individuals
indoor
with little exercise and activity trend to Correct your spelling
indoors
sir
down for a Correct your spelling
sit
prolong
period of Change the verb form
prolonged
time
, eating, drinking and sleeping all through the day. Also
, individual
who are working class citizens but whose job description requires prolong sitting for a Fix the agreement mistake
individuals
twelve hour
period without having Add a hyphen
twelve-hour
time
to take a break and always try to meet up with target
.,the only spare Add an article
the target
a target
time
is for them to eat and drink. This
leads to the accumulation of far
in the organs of the body. Correct your spelling
fat
For instance
, individuals especially women who rank highest in obesity statistics from leading a sedentary lifestyle primarily accumulate this
fast from being a house wife
which acid Correct your spelling
housewife
then
the opportunity of sleeping and eating Replace the word
than
from
the majority of the dayChange preposition
for
..
Replace the punctuation
.
...
Secondly
, this
who consume fast food
junks which are
high in Sodium and sugar tend to gain weight fast and uncontrollably leading to obesity. Correct subject-verb agreement
is
For
instance
Add a comma
,instance
majority
of men do not cook but would rather prefer to buy can Add an article
the majority
food
products because it is considered to be faster and quicker to consume without taking steps to burn out the accumulated sodium. In addition
, for
example
writing class Add a comma
,example
individual
who drive to work, get there and sit for prolonged hours, Fix the agreement mistake
individuals
drive
back home after the Correct word choice
and drive
days
job get to their home tired with having the only option of eating junk Change to a genitive case
day's
days'
food
. They do this
virtually every day without writing out consequently
leading to increase weight gain.
On the other hand
, the detrimental effect of losing oneself continuously with processed meals is the increase in morbidity and death rate. The disease acquired from excess can food
consumption and secretary lifestyle ranges from diabetes, hypertension, arteriosclerosis
which is the accumulation of fat in the arteries Correct word choice
and arteriosclerosis
while
diabetes and hypertension results
from excess sugar and sodium intake from packaged products. Change the verb form
result
Consequently
when this
illness are
not treated on Change the verb form
is
time
death which is the eventual outcome occurs. For
example
statistics from Add a comma
,example
centre
for disease control and Add an article
the centre
prevention
showed that mortality from inedible Correct your spelling
Prevention
food
consumption which are
preventable rank highest.
In conclusion, inactivity and junk Change the verb form
is
foods
are the main factors responsible for obesity and terminal illness with eventual sudden death as the prognosis.Fix the agreement mistake
food
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