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1.Is freedom of speech necessary in a free society?

#freedom #speech #society
For all eras,
freedom
 of
speech
 is very significant and essential for
huma
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humans
.
Therefore
, from my point of view is that
the
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freedom
 of
speech
 is of vital
important
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 for societies in the world. Foremost,
freedom
 of
speech
 is the demonstration of human rights and the demand
of
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 social development. By dint of speaking freely, people can express their will and aspiration, opinion and thought
; and
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, and
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hence
 they are able to protect their own legitimate rights and interests in the individual or social issues.
For instance
, the citizens have the right to vote and veto, criticize and comment
a
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law draft, decree or policy of their country.
Moreover
, thanks to
freedom
 of
speech
 the habitants are courageous to expose
crime
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crimes
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 or illegal acts of some authorities
such
 as corruption, bribery or abuse of power. Simultaneously, the residents
also
 appraise
the
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righteous deeds like charity.
Consequently
, an equitable, civilized and developed society is established, in which human rights
has
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 always been highly respected.
However
,
freedom
 of
speech
 is not only
human
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 right but
obligation
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an obligation
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also
. In fact, many habitants bribed by some political groups abused
of
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free
speech
 in order to overthrow their national government and make riots. In some cases, excessive free
speech
 provoked, offended or insulted
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the belief
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belief
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beliefs
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 and ideology of
the
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others. in conclusion, the
freedom
 of
speech
 should be limited and
aling
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along
align
 with
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framwork
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framework
 of each
nationa's
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nation's
 law to avoid any
negtive
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negative
matters.
freedom
 of
expession
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expression
 is
nesscessary
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necessary
for
citizent
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citizens
and
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free
soocity
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society
thesedays.
However
, ones should have
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limitation
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limitations
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,
stable
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 and
for
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peachfull
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peaceful
societies
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society
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.
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