The graph below shows the average number of Vietnamese students studying in France, Russia and America between 2000 and 2015.

The line graph illustrates
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the amount
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of
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learners
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of Vietnam in France, Russia and America. The data was measured in millions from 2000 and 2015.
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of students
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France and America increased dramatically over the period shown.
However
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for Russia witnessed a slow decline. Regarding the line graph, the number of pupils in Vietnam for America increase strikingly from nearly 1.5 to 5 between 2000 and 2015 and
this
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was the greatest in the group.
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the number of students in France decreased from 3.5
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2.5 in a half-decade. After
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this
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stagneted
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2.5 for
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5 years
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then
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grew sharply till
final
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year with about 4.5. The amount of
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in Russia experienced a slow drop from 3 to nearly 2 for a decade. In the following 5 years, the
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increased marginally till nearly 2.5 in the final year and
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lowest
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic migration
  • international education
  • study destination
  • enrollment rates
  • upward/downward trend
  • fluctuations
  • peak
  • plummet
  • surge
  • to plateau
  • cultural ties
  • educational policy
  • economic factors
  • bilateral agreements
  • scholarship programs
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