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In some countries, the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing

#countries #weight #people #levels #health #fitness
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Increasing average fat levels in some nations,
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people
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's physical-ability is getting down and down, quality of health is decreasing too. There are a bunch of causes that relate to
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 case.
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 essay will explain to you the causes and how to solve the
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. In my opinion, the first main factor is an incorrect way of
food
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 consumption. Nowadays, most
people
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 eat junk
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 and fast
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 almost every day. They do not care about their lifestyle. Junk
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 consists of a lot of unsaturated fats with carbohydrates,
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 factors produce a big body fat. The second
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 is the sedentary lifestyle. Especially, office-workers spend most of their time sitting in front of the computer. Motionless gives a big opportunity for fat to keep going. It directly affects human fit. To solve
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,
people
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 must take of what they eat. A meal is significant for that
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, without proper nutrition a person never would lose weight. Specifically, modern residents ought to reject junk and fast
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,
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: McDonald's burgers, pizzas, and snacks.
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, the government should provide public gyms and other sports centres. Even if overweight
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 cannot permit fitness sessions, they at least have to walk on foot a lot. In a nutshell, the addressed causes and solutions have been mentioned in the above paragraphs. All the solutions should be applied to reduce the risk of sickness among societies
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 weight increase. In the future, the percentage of individuals who take care of themselves might be expanded.
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