The pie chart shows the percentage of persons arrested in the five years ending 1994 and the bar chart shows the most recent reasons for arrest. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

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The pie charts illustrate the percentages of arrested
males
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and
females
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in the five years ending 1994,
while
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the bar chart demonstrates several reasons for arrest in percentages. Generally speaking, the data from both illustrations shows higher proportions of male perpetrators arrested, compared to that of
females
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, with the exceptions
in
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of
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public drinking, assault and unknown reasons for arrest. First of all,
according to
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the pie charts, the proportion of confined
males
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was almost one-
third,
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far
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which far
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exceeded
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exceeding
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that of
females
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which
was
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were
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approximately one-tenth. The exact percentage for the arrested
males
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was 32%
while
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the figure for the arrested
females
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accounted for just 9%. With regard to the bar chart, public drinking was ranked the most recent reason for arrest with numbers of both
males
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and
females
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far exceeding the rest, making up 31% and 38%, respectively. Interestingly,
together with
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assault and the unknown, public drinking was
also
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the reason
which
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why
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the number of arrested
females
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exceeded that of
males
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. Other reasons in the bar were relatively low in numbers, and the no-answer reason was the lowest, accounting for lower than 10% in both genders.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words males, females with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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