The pie chart shows the percentage of persons arrested in the five years ending 1994 and the bar chart shows the most recent reasons for arrest. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The pie charts illustrate the percentages of arrested
males
and
females
in the five years ending 1994,
while
the bar chart demonstrates several reasons for arrest in percentages. Generally speaking, the data from both illustrations shows higher proportions of male perpetrators arrested, compared to that of
females
, with the exceptions
in
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of
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public drinking, assault and unknown reasons for arrest. First of all,
according to
the pie charts, the proportion of confined
males
was almost one-
third,
far
Correct pronoun usage
which far
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exceeded
Wrong verb form
exceeding
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that of
females
which
was
Change the verb form
were
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approximately one-tenth. The exact percentage for the arrested
males
was 32%
while
the figure for the arrested
females
accounted for just 9%. With regard to the bar chart, public drinking was ranked the most recent reason for arrest with numbers of both
males
and
females
far exceeding the rest, making up 31% and 38%, respectively. Interestingly,
together with
assault and the unknown, public drinking was
also
the reason
which
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why
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the number of arrested
females
exceeded that of
males
. Other reasons in the bar were relatively low in numbers, and the no-answer reason was the lowest, accounting for lower than 10% in both genders.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words males, females with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.

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