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Rich countries are getting richer and poor countries are getting poorer. What are the causes? What could be done to solve this problem?

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Well , it is a
a
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true fact that
,
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nowadays the developed
nation
 become
more
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richer as they have resources and money together .
Nevertheless
 ,
due to
 less knowledge and materials , underdeveloped and developing
nations
 stay poor for a
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few decades . In
this
 essay , I would briefly explain the various factors and perfect solutions in the ensuing paragraph. 
To commence
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with
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the first and foremost point that richer
nation
 has a number of resources and information to
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 new gadget .Needless to say ,
this
nation
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 lifestyle and view of looking and noticing
things
 are totally different as they always set one target and aim to achieve it .
Whereas
 , poor
nations
 have fewer resources of information and knowledge about
things
as well as
 ,
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 just set their limits of thinking and have one particular boundary that they never close
while
 doing something different .
Hence
 , these are the few
things
 which make a huge difference between poor and richer
countries
.
Although
,
this
 can be solved with the help of developed
countries
 by providing some support and financial help .
Firstly
, rich
nations
 have to introduce new
things
 to poor
nations
 so that these people change and cross the boundaries to achieve something unique and different to the world .
Apart from
this
 , richer
countries
' governments have to give some financial support
as
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 that poor
nations
 can afford the fee of high certificates
teachers
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 with lots of practical
skill
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.
Therefore
 ,
may be
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 poor
countries
 conditions change . In conclusion ,
although
 I believe that it is the reality that these days develop
nation
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having
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 more power as compared to underdeveloped and developing
nations
due to
 the quality of knowledge and information about
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apply different
things
 .
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