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Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones.Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative development .

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It is commonly believed that many
children
 spend a number of their precious
time
 on their cell phones.
This
 development is mainly influenced by the eagerness of playing games or watch videos on social media platforms. In my view, I still believe that
this
 is bad behaviour, on how kids should spend their
time
.
Children
 are fascinated with social media networks.
For example
, Facebook, WhatsApp, and Tiktok, these sites are taking a huge
time
 on our kids every day. As technology is growing in our everyday life, it is now easier for youngsters to have smartphones of their own. A survey was taken in South Africa for upper six students in one province, about how they spend their
time
 , it was found to be true that these gadgets are taking up most of their
time
 , in comparison to what
time
 they use on other activities.
Although
 it is not a good way for
children
 to occupy themselves with mobile phones on a daily basis,
this
 kind of attitude has grown up sharply nowadays. If
this
 pattern of behaviours is not controlled, less
time
 will be left for doing other activities like cooking and cleaning.
However
,
besides
 the benefits of using mobile phones, if too much
time
 is spent on these gadgets, will result in less
time
 for important
things
 in life .
Firstly
 ,
children
 are expected to perform certain tasks on a daily basis
such
 as doing homework, assisting with household duties and even studying. If
time
 is not evenly distributed
according to
 needs , watching videos and listening to music on smartphones will result in less
time
 for other
things
.
Moreover
 , a balance is needed since a day has 24 hours only, to perform all the required
things
.
In addition
 to that,
this
 pattern of behaviour will lead to less
time
 for family interactions and might result in detrimental effects on the future of kids. In conclusion, even though
children
 enjoy consuming their
time
 on cellphones,
this
 way gives them less
time
 to do other
things
 in everyday life.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • smartphones
  • usage
  • technology
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • entertainment
  • gaming
  • social media
  • communication
  • educational resources
  • addiction
  • dependence
  • negative effects
  • physical health
  • mental health
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