Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing (for example, through cell phone tracking and security cameras). In many cases, the people being monitored are unaware that this is happening. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

In the not-too-distant past, with developing technology, a wide range of innovations have contributed to
people
's life. The most remarkable is undoubtedly
to monitor
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what community is talking to each other with a mobile phone or what they are doing by watching security cameras. Surely,
this
situation has
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pros and cons. I believe that advantageous conditions are more useful rather than disadvantageous cases. The subject will be examined in
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essay. On the one hand, there are two compelling arguments about the disadvantages of the following
such
as
right
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to privacy and not to being accepted.
Firstly
, It is likely to be absolutely
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violation of privacy between public or
governments'
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workers.
For instance
,
while
the authorities who are responsible for us are sending
e-mail
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for top secret topics like attacking areas or the regulations of
military
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, they may be listened
by
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the
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others.
Besides
, despite knowing well that
people
are living freely in a free world,
that
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being tracked might disturb humankind.
For example
, when a youngster would like to go to the cinema without permission from his family, the family can follow conveniently where their child will go
to
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or with who is.
Thus
, most
people
do not prefer to be listened to or followed by one.
On the other hand
, certainly, many beneficial ideas can assert to
like
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alleviate the rate of perpetration or like to watch alone babies at
the
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home. Simply, thanks to ubiquitous security cameras,
people
can be pursued every time. To illustrate, a thief cannot steal a car in
a
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outskirt even!
Also
, working parents desire to be informed about their children when they are alone or with a babysitter in the home. To give an example, unfortunately, it is known well that some babysitters may give rise to some bad
behavioural
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in children as parents cannot keep up with them in the work offices. In conclusion, compared to the disadvantages, I am of the opinion that it is more useful to monitor by security cameras or
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listened to.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. Surveillance
  • 2. Monitoring
  • 3. Cell phone tracking
  • 4. Security cameras
  • 5. Public safety
  • 6. Law enforcement
  • 7. Privacy concerns
  • 8. Personal freedom
  • 9. Autonomous
  • 10. Breach of trust
  • 11. Misuse of information
  • 12. Institutional integrity
  • 13. Psychological impact
  • 14. Mental well-being
  • 15. Societal trust
  • 16. Paranoia
  • 17. Transparency
  • 18. Stringent regulations
  • 19. Criminal deterrence
  • 20. Apprehension of criminals
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