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Some people think that the government should strictly control the supply of fresh water, while others think we can use as much water as we want. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, there are some different opinions involved on the freedom to
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water
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.
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 some think that it is right to
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 fresh
water
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 freely ,others believe that
water
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 usage should be closely regulated by the
government
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. In my opinion, the
government
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 should manage the
use
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 of fresh
water
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. On the one hand , there are two main reasons why citizens should be able to freely
use
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water
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.
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, the freedom to
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use
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 means that citizens will not pay
water
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 bills.
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 would save their budget for enhancing their living standards in both mental and physical aspects.
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, if governments controlled the
use
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 of fresh
water
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, they could distribute
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resource
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 to places where they could make profits.
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, in many countries in Africa, corruption and bureaucracy are the main factors to waste fresh
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.
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, it is not justified to force people to save
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resource
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 which they do not waste.
On the other hand
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, I believe that the supply of fresh
water
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 should be strictly managed. The main reason is that
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water
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 is fundamental to human existence, it is
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 a limited natural
resource
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. More specifically,
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these days,
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 is becoming scarce in some countries because there is a significant increase in population.
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 would put more pressure on
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 supplies and lead to a
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 crisis in the future if there is no restrictive management by governments.
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, in a populated state like California, in drought season, without
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 regulation and measures
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 as importing and storing
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, residents will not have enough
water
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 to live. In conclusion, it is right for residents to
use
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water
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 freely, because they can improve their living standards and wasting
water
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 is not always their mistake.
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, I believe that the
government
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 should strictly manage
this
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resource
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, which is limited.
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