The charts below show local government expenditure in 2000 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show local government expenditure in 2000 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given pie charts describe changes amongst rival government expenditures which are 9 departments in the
years
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2000 and 2010.
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, there were some small changes in some groups
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not a major difference between these certain
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. with the exception of the Internet on borrowing and welfare, had slightly increased percentage but, Transport had decreased. specifically looking at the popularity in both
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. First of all, Education was the most popular 24% and 21%,
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however
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decreased
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by 3
% When coming to Healthcare 21%, 20% and Pensions 19% respectively in both
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. These were steadily going on for over 5
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, the Internet on borrowing had grown up from 8% to 13% in 2015.
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,
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some industries had been expanding, Transport had slightly gone down from 3% to 1% unfortunately. ,
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culture and leisure and others had not much improvement because they only had 1% in certain
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