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Many can’t speak or present well in public. Some people think that it is important to speak well in public, so the training should be from school. Do you agree or disagree?

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Personally
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 can briefly explain in upcoming paragraphs. To commence with the first and foremost reason is that
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 can encourage the
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number of
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,
students
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 express their
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 to personal development ,in which
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 the
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 manner .The fact cannot be denied,if
students
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then
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 in any company with less
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Consequently
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 in front of any unknown person.
To conclude
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 would like to restate
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that
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school
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students
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 because they spend large amounts of time in
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 and friends.
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