People nowadays tend to have children at older ages Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

In recent times, people prefer to have their
offsprings
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at
older
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age
,
this
might lead to some
complications
but I think it enables the couples to be able to prepare for
the
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child birth
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financially and psychologically,
moreover
,
complications
as a result
of having
children
at
older
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age
can be corrected with the modern technology.
However
, having
children
at
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old
age
have great importance to the family at large
in
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which helps the parents to be able to cater for the needs of their
children
and
also
prepare
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the parents psychologically.
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. I know a couple who gave birth at around 35/37 yrs, the wife graduated as an accountant from a renowned University in Nigeria and the husband an Engineer from a renowned University in Nigeria as well, they have both got
good
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job
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and are living fine before they eventually got married and they got pregnant bought beautiful
baby
things that I love when I visited them during their
child
naming ceremony. They are both mature enough to cater for the needs of their
baby
and by so doing the
mother
was able to eat
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diet which helped the
baby
to grow well during
pregnancy
and
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after delivery, the
baby
will suck well
due to
the good food the
mother
eat. The couple will be able to give the
children
good education
due to
their employment.
Nevertheless
, having
children
at
older
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age
comes with some
complications
which
includes
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menopause for the
mother
. A woman who got married at 40 might not be privileged to have more than one
child
due to
menopause,
moreover
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the
child
during
pregnancy
is subjected to chromosomal abnormalities,
also
late
pregnancy
leads to eclampsia
due to
rise
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in blood pressure which can lead to growth retardation for the fetus during
pregnancy
.
For example
,
i
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know a couple who got married late, the wife got pregnant and started having high blood pressure which was discovered during
ante natal
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visit she did all her investigations and was closely monitored,
however
in order to save the life of the
baby
and the
mother
, at 36 weeks cesarean section was done for the
mother
, after her discharged from the hospital, followed up was done in order to monitor the blood pressure. The
complications
of having
children
at
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old
age
can
been
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corrected with technology. In
conclusion
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having
children
in old
age
will help the parents to
be psychologically prepare
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for the
children
in all spheres
although
the demerits can
also
be corrected with the help of modern technology.
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