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The Internet has made our lives easier or more difficult. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

‏Nowadays, our lives
become
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have become
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 much easier because of the
internet
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which
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, which
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 is an essential part of our society. The facilities of reaching any sources and contact with others are the
major two
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two major
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 reasons
and
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, and
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 I completely agree. ‏Finding information has become easy and possible with the
excite
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excitement
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 of the
internet
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 . ‏By clicking a button in milliseconds
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,
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enormous
of
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amounts of
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 data or
documentary
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documents
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 will appear
while
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 sitting in your chair .
Although
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 sensitive content
in
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is in
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 the network ‏informative in that
platform
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the platform
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 can be available for people of different ages ‏
such
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 as homework, or
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assignments
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assignment
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assignment,
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as well as
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adult
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adults
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 can use mass media in various ways . I believe it is
utility rich
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utility-rich
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 resources ‏  Making people closer than ever feature of the
internet
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 , even the elderly community
use
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uses
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.
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it.
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 Calling and texting are fundamental for our society, people share their lives with friends and family
Their
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. Their
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 lives
to
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with
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 friends and
family
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family,
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 especially if they are in a foreign country. Applications like Snapchat make homesickness tolerable, and the development of the
internet
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 can be hard to use
though
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, though
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. ‏In conclusion, even though the
internet
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 evolution can be difficult to deal with . I agree,
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Internet
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the Internet
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 has a vast impact on our
life
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lives
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 and everything related to it makes life much easier than in past decades.

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structure
Plan before you write. Start with a clear intro, state your view, then two or three ideas with reasons and one or two examples.
coherence
Make each paragraph have one main idea. Use a simple topic sentence and a short example.
grammar
Use correct grammar. Check verb form and sentence order. Use simple link words like and, but, also.
content
Give specific benefits of the internet. Say how it helps study, work, or talk with others.
conclusion
End with a clear conclusion. Restate your view.
focus
Your view is clear from the start.
example
You give examples like homework and Snapchat to show ideas.
balance
You show how life can be easy with contact to others.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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