In the past, shopping was a routine domestic task. Many people nowadays regards it as a hobby. To what extent do you think this is a positive trend?

In the past, shopping was defined as a routine domestic task, but nowadays many

people

are starting to define shopping as a hobby. In my opinion, I think it is a positive trend. First of all, in the past, when

people

were going shopping they usually just went to a place where they could buy the things they wanted, and after the mission was completed they went straight back home.

Usually

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this

kind of routine never takes long.

On the other hand

, nowadays when

people

go shopping, they usually will go to a random mall which has a lot of stores for them to walk and spend their entire day in that mall. But

instead

of buying things that are necessary, they just like to spend time there.

Although

some

people

might see that as wasting time or wasting

money

to buy something

that is

not necessary, they are having fun doing

this

. In modern days, lots of teenagers decide to stay at home all day looking at

some

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screens playing video games and doing nothing. If more teenagers' hobbies are shopping they will go outside more often

instead

of staying at home. Some benefits of having shopping as a hobby

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that

people

can go outside and walk more often, they will even feel happy going shopping.

Although

shopping can not be defined as

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exercise, walking more often is still good for their own body. The one and only disadvantage is that they might be spending too much

money

and waste a lot of

money

, but

this

situation can be solved if they were

teached

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how to use

money

rationally. In conclusion, having shopping as a hobby is a positive trend because not only can it make them happy, it is good for their physical health too.

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there are not a lot of disadvantages.

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