some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing

#people #lives #change

Some

people

argue that there is not nothing bad if you are

sticked

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doing

same

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activities regularly

while

others can not live without changing. In

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essay, I will look

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sides of the argument and give my own opinion. On the one hand, if we do things regularly,

as a

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it helps us to be more organized. Our life starts being managed

due to

our routine and the way we are living.

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example

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doing exercise

everyday

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helps you to

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fit and healthy. Other good habits like reading, healthy eating and meditation were built on regularly practising.

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we can build

self discipline

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by forcing ourselves

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things cyclically. From

childhood

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everybody used to learn new skills

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this

way.

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, I believe that doing something new with our life scenery

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us to be our better version day by day or year by year. As

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days go and seasons change we

also

cannot remain unchanged. As a being older our behaviour and interest

also

change.

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we don't become friends with

people

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were close to us in our childhood. The reason is that

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we are changed and

taste

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people

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before. If we don't do changes, how

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know

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something better for us? We should try new subjects, tastes, travels and everything

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we can.

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, we can create new opportunities. In conclusion,

while

people

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by doing

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things, I believe that we can not rebuild our best version without new experiences.

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