some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing

Some
people
argue that there is not nothing bad if you are
sticked
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doing
same
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activities regularly
while
others can not live without changing. In
this
essay, I will look
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sides of the argument and give my own opinion. On the one hand, if we do things regularly,
as a
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it helps us to be more organized. Our life starts being managed
due to
our routine and the way we are living.
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doing exercise
everyday
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helps you to
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fit and healthy. Other good habits like reading, healthy eating and meditation were built on regularly practising.
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we can build
self discipline
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by forcing ourselves
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things cyclically. From
childhood
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everybody used to learn new skills
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this
way.
On the other hand
, I believe that doing something new with our life scenery
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us to be our better version day by day or year by year. As
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days go and seasons change we
also
cannot remain unchanged. As a being older our behaviour and interest
also
change.
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Furthermore
we don't become friends with
people
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were close to us in our childhood. The reason is that
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we are changed and
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in
people
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before. If we don't do changes, how
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know
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something better for us? We should try new subjects, tastes, travels and everything
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we can.
As a result
, we can create new opportunities. In conclusion,
while
people
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by doing
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things, I believe that we can not rebuild our best version without new experiences.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • status quo
  • stagnation
  • routine
  • comfort zone
  • predictability
  • specialization
  • innate
  • personal growth
  • adaptability
  • fast-paced
  • new horizons
  • equilibrium
  • progress
  • dynamic
  • transformation
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