some people think they have right to use as much freshwater as they want. Other believe governments should tightly control the use of freshwater as it is limited resource. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, humans use some unrenewable
resourses
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wrong way. Freshwater is not an exception, but there is a contention over whether people have to consume it as much as they want or government have to restrict its usage as it is considered
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agrees, that authorities have to supervise freshwater
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to avoid
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shortages in the future and prevent some
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environmental
disasters. On one hand, the amount of freshwater per person should be reduced to
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minimise
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shortages in the next centuries. Because
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the
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people used to drink is considered
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resource, it can end up easily through 100 years.
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humanity can become
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risk of extinction in the relatively nearest future and that's why
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support controlling the level of freshwater usage all around the globe.
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that people can
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out in
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centuries, because of
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, a lot of individuals disagree with
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to be used in any
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. As
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is undeniably
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part of human
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, they need it to maintain their basic needs like brushing
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or taking a shower.
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useless expenditures that can be avoided by
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restrictions in case of saving our planet from
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disagree
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with the statement that
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usage should
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unlimited.
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, recent researches claim
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up with fires all over the planet. In
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conclusion
, global
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cut can help to avoid useless prevent humanity from nature problems in the future, so
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that
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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