The charts below show local government expenditure in 2000 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie chart gives information about

government

expenditure between 2010 to 2015 years . At first ,glance it is evident that education , healthcare and pensions spend more than other kinds of

government

To begin

, in

2010

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year .

This

year

government

spend a significant amount on Education , which has approximately a quarter percentage , healthcare , pensions and defence

also

have similar indicators.

However

the most under index in culture and leisure and welfare . They are not widely used,

therefore

have below the norms. Average things which the

government

spend rarely they are transport and interest on borrowing .

The both

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kinds have one in twenty per cent. A

simillar

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similar

pattern shows in the 2015 period . The indicators remain unchanged ,

however

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,however

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the amount of welfare increases to thirteen per cent,

likewise

the interest on borrowing

also

grows to one in ten indexes. The number of pensions slightly alters.

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The charts below show local government expenditure in 2000 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Being famous on the Internet is a good because of some reasons Is this a positive or negative development?

In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shoppings centres or malls to do their shoping. Is this a positive or a negative development ?

Nowadays more and more older people who are looking for a position have to compete with younger people for the same jobs. What problems does this cause? What are some possible solutions?