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In some areas of world people love to live in traditional lifestyle while in other regions they have a modern living standard. Why it happens? Discuss both views for supporting of your topic.

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in some parts of the globe, communities choose a traditional way to live,
however
, residents in other regions prefer to pursue a modern
life
. I opine it relates to the historical background of the country and the political views of the governments. The richer
history
Correct article usage
the history
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 a country has the more tendency is seen in
people
 to stick to some old habits.
For instance
, Iran has more than 2,000 years of antiquity and many individuals still stand for their ancestors' way in regard to illness treatments
such
 as stomachache, joint problems, or giving birth since they find it more beneficial in comparison with chemical medicines or therapy methods. It happens
due to
 the fact that Iran was the land of medical science
therefore
people
 are very knowledgeable in that case.
On the other hand
, official leaders of a territory play an initial role in either deterring or encouraging
people
 to embrace a noble
life
. To put it in illustration, China is one of the most ancient countries but very advanced in technology as their president supports the idea of being a pioneer and provides brand new machines at the lowest price so that
people
 can afford them.
This
 way more and more citizens tend to have a modern
life
 and create the establishment of an advanced living and vision. In conclusion, if a nation follows a contemporary or old manner of living is based on their belief in the benefits of traditional
life
 and the Incentives that the governments consider building a modern society.
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Task Response
Address both views thoroughly and with clear examples to fully support your points. Ensure that the introduction and conclusion are more specific to the topic and provide a clear structure for your essay.
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