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Environment problems such as pollution and climate variations are incresing nowadays. The goverments have taken some measures at problem be solved.?

#environment #pollution #climate #variations #goverments #measures
Pollution of nature
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and
 climate change and various problems in the environment are increasing today. Governments are taking some measures at the global level,but it is difficult to
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eliminate
them .
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 suggest that the biggest
problem
 caused by
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 have always fallen short of the mark and offer some solutions to the
problem
. The foremost
problem
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 why global measures have failed is that the grow up
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world is shying abroad from the
problem
 it needs to experience,for
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the damage
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 it did to the environment in the colonial commercial revolution times. On
other
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 hand
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if we need to see a real positives change the developed world has to do
nore
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more
 than the developing world.
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 it can not an equal role. Another factor to consider is providing wealth and
techology
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technology
 coupled
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renewable
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 origin of energy to the developing and the least industrial countries. It is true that
development
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enivorment
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environment
are always seen at
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 with each other . Let the environment always take a back seat to
development
.
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 looking at the two separate entities has
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 and brought us to our current. May support the view that sustainable
development
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is the
development
 of responding to modern requirements without harming the
enivronment
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environment
. On the
whole
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 it can be seen clearly, why the steps taken so far have failed to save the
enivornment
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environment
,
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 the time has come to do some soul-searching and take
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 steps
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the
enivornment
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environment
 to put is simply the relationship between human life and plant life and it
enivornment
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environment
are all interdependent.
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