The chart below compares the percentage of time Australian mothers and fathers spent helping their children with four activities in 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below compares the percentage of time Australian mothers and fathers spent helping their children with four activities in 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph shows the percentage of
time
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Australians spend helping their children with four different activities .
Overall
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mothers are spent more
time
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on child care than fathers . The highest spending of
time
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around four helping activities show dressing more than 70 per
cent
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of
time
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allocated to mothers ,
while
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fathers show the insignificant per
cent
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. And 50 per
cent
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of the
time
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progenitors attend together . Next goes , homework females allocate 60 per
cent
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of their
time
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to studying with their kids ,
whereas
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males contribute only 10 per
cent
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. Playing games with progenitors are popular activity 70 per
cent
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of both men and women attend ,
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nevertheless
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,nevertheless
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men are played more than women . More often both men and women prepare for bed their kid 50 per
cent
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of the
time
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, but females are contributed more than males . . . . . . . . . . .
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words time, cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • time spent
  • Australian mothers
  • fathers
  • helping
  • children
  • activities
  • reading
  • homework
  • playing sports
  • general play
  • comparison
  • 2013
  • significantly
  • difference
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