The chart below compares the percentage of time Australian mothers and fathers spent helping their children with four activities in 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph shows the percentage of
time
Australians spend helping their children with four different activities . Overall
mothers are spent more time
on child care than fathers .
The highest spending of time
around four helping activities show dressing more than 70 per cent
of time
allocated to mothers , while
fathers show the insignificant per cent
. And 50 per cent
of the time
progenitors attend together . Next goes , homework females allocate 60 per cent
of their time
to studying with their kids , whereas
males contribute only 10 per cent
. Playing games with progenitors are popular activity 70 per cent
of both men and women attend ,nevertheless
men are played more than women . More often both men and women prepare for bed their kid 50 per Add a comma
,nevertheless
cent
of the time
, but females are contributed more than males . . . . . . . . . . .Submitted by muharodnoy on
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