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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able ho read everything they want online without paying . To what extent do you agree or disagree.

#future #nobody #newspapers #books
Thanks to modern technology, humans now have remarkable ways by which they can access unlimited information related to the topics and it can observe that a large number of
people
 drawing attention towards the latest technology. I partly agree with the above statement I will articulate my pinpoint in forthcoming paragraphs.
To begin
 with, it is
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well-decomented
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well-documented
 fact that the Internet provides
people
 with data with satisfactory websites. To dive into roots,
people
 who are seeking in detail Internet provide them
a
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bunch of websites where they can get massive knowledge
according to
 need.
Furthermore
, a student has been using the internet for study purposes and electronic
books
 helps him to get rid of bundles of
books
at
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 physical or online class.
For instance
, in Asian countries where students have to learn more than 7 subjects at school. So it is very difficult for students to carry all
books
 that cause backbone and exhaustion. Students prefer to read from electronic material where they can take bundles of
books
 in one device.
On the other hand
, electronic
devices
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not beneficial for all groups of
people
.
For instance
, teenagers and elder
people
 faced many difficulties to understand the features of electronic
devices
 and as a
,
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result habit of reading is not adopted by teenagers. Software studies
leads
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 to humans numerous problems
such
 as obesity and eyesight affection. In my opinion, with the rise of electronic
devices
 printed newspapers and magazines will remain ubiquity in human existence for those who prefer to read from hard form. It is better for teenagers
as well as
 for senior citizens. To recapitulate, electronic
devices
 provide huge data related to topics and
helps
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 an individual in his studies and get rid of him
from
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a bundle of
books
 meanwhile newspaper will be part of society for those who prefer to read in hard form.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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