In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

There is no doubt that there is a wide range of cuisines for humans to explore in recent years. In fact,
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preferences
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towards having food that has scrumptious
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and textures
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stopped them from having a healthy lifestyle. I feel that the government's idea of increasing the tax amount for
such
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foods
can discourage
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people
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on a daily basis. I believe
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the influence of
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cultures
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food
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through social mediate platforms has altered the
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people
ratio in some nations.
For example
, the younger generations of Japan have shown great interest in having
foods
like Burgers and pizzas. As these
foods
are high in calories, heart attack and obesity are seen to be
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a higher rate among Japanese
people
.
Therefore
, the health department can warn the social media influencers, who introduce
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to
such
processed
foods
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ask them to create
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awareness
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the effect
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such
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have on our
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.
On the contrary
, some argue that having
foods
of different cultures
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will help us to create a better cultural bond. Cuisines globally depict their
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taste and interest
along with
their respective country’s heritage value. To illustrate, In today’s world,
foods
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notice are welcomed
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by many globally.
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has resulted in tinned beans, processed cheese,
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half-baked veggies which, will all result in deadly
dieseases
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diseases
. In conclusion,
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important for a ruling party to stop its citizens from having deadly health problems by, increasing the price rate of
such
foreign
foods
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awareness about the health issues it will cause
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longer run.
Furthermore
, setting certain food standards for their nation will
also
reduce
such
unhealthy eating habits.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • health outcomes
  • healthcare costs
  • consumer behavior
  • socio-economic backgrounds
  • ethical implications
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies
  • regulations
  • nutritional content
  • healthier food options
  • government intervention
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