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As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Although
 the prime objective of any business is to earn a profit, businessmen
also
 have many social responsibilities. I completely agree with
this
 statement and in the following ,paragraphs it will be discussed. Every trade ought to make money to run their field which basically includes buying input materials, machinery, bearing processing and transport costs, paying employees salaries and so on. Keeping aside these costs, most of the company makes a good profit and from
this
 profit, they can take part in shaping the
society
. In a community, rich and poor people live together. Companies/businessmen ought to come forward to help the underprivileged inhabitants of the colony. They can participate in various welfare movements like feeding the hungry, building houses for the homeless, buying clothes etc. They can
also
 build a mosque, playground, gymnasium etc.
This
 type of action balances
society
. Not only social imbalance mitigates through
this
 but
also
 their reputation increases.
Consequently
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 it helps them to grow the business faster. If the businessman does not come forward to do social activities
then
 crime like theft cases will be increased
due to
 poverty. The young generation will be demotivated and learn nothing from their peers. By doing social work, they can build awareness to avoid nuisance and set an example of good work.
This
 is very much expected to build a beautiful
society
. In conclusion, businesses have to earn money to run the wheel of the company
as well as
 have to contribute to building a sound environment in
society
 by taking part in numerous social activities.
Submitted by Md. Anwar Hossain on

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social responsibilities
  • Corporate social responsibility
  • Ethical behavior
  • Societal impact
  • Stakeholders
  • Profit-driven
  • Public perception
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Community development
  • Human rights
  • Workplace safety
  • Altruism
  • Balanced approach
  • Accountability
  • Consumer loyalty
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