The bar chart provides information about the level of female unemployment in four parts of the United Kingdom between the years of 2013 to 2014

The bar chart provides information about the level of female unemployment in four parts of the United Kingdom between the years

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2013 to 2014. In general, the graph shows that the percentages of unemployed women in England and Scotland had

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similarly

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strong number,

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the figures for Wales and Northern

Ireland

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that it was a small minority. From the

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unemployment

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accounted for 6.8% by the year 2013, and

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it fell by 0,3% in 2014. In terms of Scotland, it began at 6,1% and it increased slightly to 6.7% over

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timeframe. In 2013, the rate of unemployed females in Wales and Northern

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5.4% and 5.6% respectively.

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, Wales the levels of female unemployment performed better than North

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taking in 5.0%, and the unemployed women in North

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illustrate

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fall to 0,4% in 2014.