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The maps show the park which was built in 1920 and current construction of the park.

The maps show the park which was built in 1920 and current construction of the park.
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The two maps demonstrate two versions of Grange
Park
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, its old construction in 1920 and its new current features. Considering the right side of the
park
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, a notable change in the
garden
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's sections is seen in the maps. On the right of the Eldon Street ,entrance the greenhouse is replaced by a water feature
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 an additional entrance for underground car parking.
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, the pond for the plants and the rose
garden
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 on the right top corner of the old structure are substituted by a playing area and a cafe. Moving to the centre of the
park
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, the northern and southern entrances remained unchanged.
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, the middle part where the fountain existed in 1920 changed into a rose
garden
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 surrounded by seating areas. The left side of the
park
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 consisted previously of two separate rose gardens, a stage, and seating areas. Currently, it turned into one remaining rose
garden
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 in the top left corner and
amphitheatre
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an amphitheatre
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 for concerts in the centre.
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, the design of the
park
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 has changed significantly in today's structure, where the rose
garden
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 is the only section of the
park
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 that stayed in the new version with a noticeable reduction of its space.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words park, garden with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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