Every large city in the world is facing the problem of increasing traffic from the growing numbers of cars and other motor vehicles. what factors are responsible for the increase in traffic? How can this traffic problem be reduced?

The increasing business and population in metropolitan cities lead to the high vehicle demand nowadays,
as a result
,
traffic
congestion is getting worse. I identify two factors which
leads
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to increasing vehicle population. There are easy
instalment
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and
also
low
tax
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.
Therefore
, the government should make a plan to mitigate that issues. There are two big problems why
traffic
is getting complex.
To begin
with, the demand
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cars or motorcycles is soaring over the years to support their economic activities,
while
banks and other creditors create a program
such
as easy instalments to gain address that trend. The easiness of credit instalments led to a boom in vehicle sales,
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resulting in worse
traffic
. Another point was cheap
tax
from the government.
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thing
are
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the roots
why
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people
possesses
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many cars and motorcycle in their home, so
this
factor exacerbates the
traffic
congestion in every big city across the globe.
On the other hand
, two factors I identified to mitigate
this
situation is:
firstly
, the provisions and requirement of instalment have to
strictly
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set, and the creditor could make the required documents become more difficult and selective for
customer
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who wants to purchase a car or motorcycle.
Secondly
, the authorities could impose a progressive
tax
if someone wants to have second or more cars.
For instance
, Singapore imposed high taxes and provisions for their citizen if they would like to buy a car. That policy is proven to reduce and prevent
traffic
problems whilst
citizen
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are supported by
a
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good public transportation. In conclusion, I identify that the easiness of instalment and cheap
tax
that causes
traffic
problems are more complex in metro cities.
Hence
, implementing strict provisions of instalments and
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progressive
tax
could reduce the problem above.
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