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In some countries, an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Nowadays, there are all kinds of fast
food
 almost everywhere, from restaurants like McDonald's or just simply hotdog sellers in the streets. They all have the same goal is to provide your breakfast or lunch fast and conveniently with ready-made foods only waiting for your order. Despite that being said, having too much of quick meals like that can easily result in various diseases relating to lack of nutrition, too much fat and so on.
Thus
, more taxes have been considered to be put on those. But in my opinion, everything should stay unchanged as it is and will be. On the first hand, fast
food
 is on the verge of becoming more and more popular when people are having the tendency to choose fast
food
 over traditional home meals.
For instance
, birthday parties at home are relatively rare now, with the tiredness of cleaning things up,
instead
, McDonald's, KFC or some barbecue restaurant appear to be the perfect solution. In fact, higher taxes won't solve thoroughly anything, especially with the ones eating fast
food
 once a week or thrice a month.
On the other hand
, with the fast and convenience of pre-cooked
food
, it has been everyone's
favorite
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 choice for breakfast, lunch, supper or even dinner and there are additional services
such
 as takeaway or deliver-to-home making it easier for remote workers or when you can't or don't want to go out in a rainy day.
Besides
, big brands like McDonald's or KFC are global now, and a tax on fast
food
 means declaring war on those companies and
also
 on citizens, too. No matter what the government explains, a fight will be started by the people to the government in order to remove the tax on their daily meals and it will end up disastrously. As a matter of fact, people in countries like England, Italy or Germany would be upset too seeing their Fish&Chips, Pizza and sausages being taxed higher.
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