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You would like to work in a different city to be closer to your family Write a letter to your employer to request a transfer to another office. Explain why you would like to move Request that your employer place you in a specific city Request that it be completed by a certain date

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Dear Madam Sevara, I am writing to let you know that I am moving to another workplace.
Firstly
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, l and my family members are changing our current accommodation.
Secondly
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, I would like to be a colleague with young teachers and learn new teaching methods and technologies.
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, as my new workplace is one of the well-known schools I find myself in there. I would like to ask for the documents which I gave to
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 school office.They are very important for my new career. When can I get them? l was informed by the new school office about the transfer date. I will meet the Headteacher at 8. a.m. next Monday and start my new work. Thank you for supporting me in my both personal and professional life. Yours faithfully, Nornisso
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task achievement
Make sure to directly address the request to transfer to a specific city to strengthen the focus of your letter.
task achievement
Consider providing a more detailed explanation of why you want to move, including specific reasons related to being closer to your family.
coherence and cohesion
For a stronger structure, organize your paragraphs around specific topics and ensure a clear progression of ideas throughout.
suitable writing tone
Use a polite and formal tone throughout your letter to maintain professionalism.
suitable writing tone
The letter politely makes a request, which is appropriate for its context.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing are appropriately used, showing respect towards the employer.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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