Some people say that the internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to so much information creates problems. State whether you agree or disagree with these statements and support your point of view.

In today's globalised world
internet
has
its
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huge role in human life. Some believe that computers supply
people
with a lot of essential
information
.
Other claim
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that
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go gain much
information
creats
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creates
problems. In
this
essay, I will discuss both sides of
this
issue and I will include my own viewpoint.
First,
in my
opinion
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internet
nowadays is the
most great
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invention. Using
internet
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the internet
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makes easier
people
's life. Before accessing
to
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any
information
people
spend much time in libraries.
For instance
, when I was
student
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I use to go to
library
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the library
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every weekend for my research. It
take
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me three or
for
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four
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times to arrive there and back
to
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home and I can not relax,
feel
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tired
in
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weekdays.
Besides
, in order to find what book I need I have to explain
librarians
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and it was
borring
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boring
.
Moreover
, in
libraries
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data we need is less than in Google. We can access any
information
by
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one click without going out.
Furthermore
,
internet
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the internet
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connect
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connects
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people
all over the world. Individuals from different countries can keep in touch
by up to
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date gadgets. For
examle
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example
, after graduating
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university
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I lost contact with my
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groupmates. Thanks
Facebook
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after ten years I can keep in touch with them.
In addition
, in huge
corparations
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corporations
employees work
withouth
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without
going
work
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.
For instance
, during
pandemic
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the pandemic
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in many companies workers
stayet
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stayed
home and worked on
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the internet
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internet
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. In
conclution
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conclusion
, summarizing all these points, I believe computers are our friends. If we use
internet
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for
usefull
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useful
issues it will help us to reach our goal.
Besides
, it connects us with our friends and
people
who
far
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from us.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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