In many parts of the world children are given more freedom than in the past. Is this a positive or a negative development?

Young people are provided more independence than in the
last
years around the world. Nowadays
world
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is adjusting
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the law
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law
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laws
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and
standard
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standards
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of the community. I believe
this
condition is positive for evolution. There are many benefits of
youngster
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enjoying more autonomy. Now
children
come behind the global traditions which is the amalgamation of the excellent points of different
culture
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cultures
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of the world. Some
countries
develop
than
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other
countries
. Because that country's youth have freedom. Most
countries
improve more rapidly because of
this
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this country
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countries
of many oral ways of doing things and changing autonomous and more open communities.
Moreover
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today's
youngster
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have the power of the internet and the space station TV in their hands .Today's
children
are the most
well educated
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generation than ever
on
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the history of
human
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. They don't know what their parents and grandparents
.
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They have lots of opportunities in front of them
which
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they would like to survey. They conserve
of
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their decision and do
Not
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not
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hesitate
strolling
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to stroll
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on the path. They don't
scared
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danger.
For example
in the past
children
are
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faced more
pressures
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pressure
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by
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their parents to various occupations. But today's
children
are going into computer games and other sports
field
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.
On the other hand
occasionally
this
independent
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can be harmful
for
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to
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juvenile
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. They like responsibility and can see
unusually
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of
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their actions.
For
example
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someone
want
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to explain something to
they
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them
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. But they don't want it. Because they are organized for independence. Freedoms should show in small steps so that the teens are prepared to advance forward having proven their talent to manage each small motion. Too much
independent
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independence
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can end them in unfortunate company and
also
narcotic.
To conclude
it can be repeated that
independent
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adored
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by
children
but the duty is on the parents to ready them for
this
in small steps so that the detrimental edge of
this
surfeit
freedom
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of freedom
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does not go hostile
them
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to them
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.
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