Write about the following topic: Some people think that hosting an international sports event is good for the country, while some people think it is bad. Discuss both views and state your opinion.

Nowadays, one group
of
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assumes that taking the
responsibily
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responsibility
to organize some sports
events
in your state is
benefical
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beneficial
for the country,
while
others suggest that it leads to negative consequences. Despite the possible drawback
such
as
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number of criminals,
i
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agree that conducting special sports
events
is a good
achievment
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achievement
for the locals because of
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of international tourists. On the one hand, worldwide tournaments, as a rule, always
atract
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attract
a lot of people from
the
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different countries. Fans are ready to travel to
the
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any place in the world in order to support their
favorite
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team or player.
Moreover
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they always waste a lot of their finances to book a comfortable hotel room, to taste traditional dishes or to make a bet in the local casino,
as a result
, a
countries
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budget is
increasing
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by
tourists
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taxes, which can be spent to develop medicine, infrastructure or education system.
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, After FIFA 2012, which had taken place in Brazil, their
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income increased
on
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approximately 65%, compared with 2011.
On the other
hand
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a
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meaning
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that a lot of bandits follow
such
events
. Their opinion
based
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on the fact, that
football
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fans community contains a number of cruel
individual
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, which organize fights and robberies, leading to the victims from locals.
This
essay disagrees with
this
argument because
government
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always improve their security system and police patrols before
start
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an event.
For instance
, taking Brazil as an example again, which usually has a
hight
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criminal rate,
nevertheless
during
the
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FIFA 2012 amount of
comitted
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committed
crimes have reduced because of a
nuge
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huge
number of police officers. In conclusion,
this
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suggest
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that creating popular sports
events
directly
into
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your county is profitable and leads to improving
a
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quality of
locals
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lifes
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, but authorities should provide high-ranked security to protect citizens from possible vandals.
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