Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities. Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages?

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era, there are a lot of folks who
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overtime
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, they do not have enough
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for their spare
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. In my idea,
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there are few merits for occupation over
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, the negative aspects of that are far more. I would like to explain both sides of
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position. On the one hand, one of the drawbacks of working more than standard is a decrease in the efficiency of employees if they do not have enough
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for rest or leisure activities. From
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point of view, many commentators justifiably argue that the percentage of mistakes by employees increases significantly if they do not have enough
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for leisure activities. they believe the body and the brain need to be relaxed and relieved for recharging that the sufficient spare
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brings that.
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, another detriment of
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less communication with family or friends. Social problems may have some psychological diseases
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as depression or isolation in the long run.
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, there are those who subscribe to the view that economic problems are the chief cause for the worker that
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more than duty. From
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point of view especially in the developing country the standard wages of workers do not enough for them
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they should more working prolonged hours.
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in Brazil the regular salary of a worker is 500$ per month
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only the minimal cost of rental accommodation is more than 450$ per month,
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the individuals have to
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overtime. In conclusion, despite a few positive aspects of extra
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as solving some economic issues, it seems to me, the drawbacks of them outweigh. Extra
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in the long run is
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likely to lead
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problems and social troubles.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • stress relief
  • productivity
  • economic growth
  • career progression
  • skill enhancement
  • quality time
  • financial security
  • leisure activities
  • physical health
  • personal relationships
  • stress-related illnesses
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