Some people believe that children should attend extra classes after school while some disagree. Discuss both the views and give your own opinion.

Some parents force their children to participate in additional classes after school,

while

others think that it is not that essential.

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agrees, that pupils don't need to spend their

time

on some extra

lessons

as it is crucial to relax and do hobbies. On the one have, a lot of individuals think that

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more

lessons

is rather beneficial to minors.

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is a common misconception people

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because they assume that extra classes can make their children smarter.

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However

, it can lead to adverse

remifications

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ramifications

like fragile, which can

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motivation loss,

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out and,

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unstability

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this

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do

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not support

this

point of view.

For example

, psychologists claim, that minors need more

time

for relaxation that the average adult in order to maintain their health.

On the other hand

, there is an opinion, that extra

lessons

do not worth

this

amount of

time

and it can be more useful for juveniles to spend it doing some activities like playing sports or reading books. Those people believe that it can have a positive impact and develop essential skills.

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agrees with

this

statement as doing hobbies develop vital

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of

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them more flexible. To

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, psychologists

recommends

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parents

to

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attract their children to

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chess as it improves their ability to think in a logical way in conclusion,

this

essay

agrees that

lessons

after school affect minors negatively as a lack of

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lead to

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bad consequences

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while

spending

this

time

on hobbies or refreshment.