Some people believe that children should attend extra classes after school while some disagree. Discuss both the views and give your own opinion.

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Some parents force their children to participate in additional classes after school,
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others think that it is not that essential.
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agrees, that pupils don't need to spend their
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on some extra
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as it is crucial to relax and do hobbies. On the one have, a lot of individuals think that
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is rather beneficial to minors.
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because they assume that extra classes can make their children smarter.
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like fragile, which can
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out and,
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, mental
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not support
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, psychologists claim, that minors need more
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for relaxation that the average adult in order to maintain their health.
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, there is an opinion, that extra
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do not worth
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and it can be more useful for juveniles to spend it doing some activities like playing sports or reading books. Those people believe that it can have a positive impact and develop essential skills.
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agrees with
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statement as doing hobbies develop vital
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them more flexible. To
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, psychologists
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parents
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attract their children to
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chess as it improves their ability to think in a logical way in conclusion,
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agrees that
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after school affect minors negatively as a lack of
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bad consequences
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spending
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on hobbies or refreshment.
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