The money spent on space research has brought enormous benefits to mankind, but it could be more usefully applied. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people suggest that the
money
they spent on universe
research
has brought enormous benefits to
human
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humans
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, but it could invest in
another important projects
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. Personally, I totally agree with
this
statement.
Firstly
, investing
money
in researching
about
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the
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space helps human have more experience and it
also
bring
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more knowledge about the universe
as well as
the things surrounding the place they
alive
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. They can find out and
discovery
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more new things in
the
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space
such
as
meteorite
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meteorites
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, the rest of the rocket or something else about the planets.
For example
, in the past, the first human, who set foot on the moon to
discovery
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or
launching
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the
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rocket and so on. All of
this
discovery will open
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the human’s
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human’s
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mind and it play an important role in the
research
and develop science.
After
this
research
,
student
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will
also
learn more knowledge and they might be the next generation who can change the world.
On the other hand
, spending
money
on
another thing
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other things
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such
as
economic
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,
factory
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factories
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,
entertainment
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and entertainment
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might be better. Nowadays, many people prefer having a quality
live
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at
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the present to worrying about the future. They only care about their family and the way to earning to their
live
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as well as
take care
for
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their family. So many people get
stress
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and they will find
the
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pleasure
to
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entertain
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.
Thus
, investing in
entertain
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will bring more benefits than spending
money
on space
research
. In general, science is very significant but I think investing in the present will bring more benefits to mankind and it could be more usefully applied.
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