The money spent on space research has brought enormous benefits to mankind, but it could be more usefully applied. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, when technology has increased, people want to discover more about the world and
also
the
universe
.
As a result
, many governments spent much
money
on
space
research to bring enormous benefits to mankind. But for me, I just partly agree with it because that cash could be more usefully applied.
Firstly
, I will come up with why the
space
discover
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brought huge benefits to
humans
. Most of
money
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the money
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for
space
experience was spent
for
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building
the
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spaceships and satellites to discover the galaxy. As can be seen, experience outside the Earth is very hard but with the
money
spent on it, many important information about our
universe
are
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sent to the Earth. Discovering
space
can help
humans
to know more about how everything around us
were
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created and what our
space
looks like.
Moreover
, when our planet has to handle many effects like global warming or greenhouse effects which were created by mankind,
as a result
, many scientists warn that our planet will be destroyed soon in the future. And the
universe
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explore
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will bring
humans
opportunities to find “another Earth” for our lives.
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the other hand, I think that
money
spent
for
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space
discover
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could be more usefully applied. As an example, there have been many accidents when researching
universe
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such
as wrongly creating spaceships that
also
lose
money
and
humans
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of
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governments.
Along with
that reason, that amount of
money
can be invested
for
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other fields like education, science and physics or concentrating more
about
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the environment around us to preserve our planet.
To conclude
, spending
money
on
space
research can bring much important information to mankind but I think the governments
also
should
be
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concentrate
in
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humans’
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lives
of
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their countries and
also
habitats to protect our world.
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