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The table below shows the weight of people in a particular country from 1999 to 2009.

The table below shows the weight of people in a particular country from 1999 to 2009.
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The presented data encompasses various weight categories for women and
men
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, indicating different percentages observed between 1999 and 2009. Primarily, normal weight was the most common group for both genders throughout the examined period, with fluctuating percentages ranging from 41% to 51% for males and females. Females,
on the other hand
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, showed a larger frequency of
underweight
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being underweight
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 than overweight, with the highest difference of 9% seen in 1999 and 2009.
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,
men
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 exhibited a higher incidence of overweight. In 1999, there was a peak of 30% overweight
men
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, but fortunately, the proportion steadily declined from 1999 to 2004, reaching a low of 19%. In summary, the majority of individuals maintained weight within the appropriate range. The data highlights a growing trend among
men
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 in addressing overweight issues as a means of prioritizing their health and well-being.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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