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Some people believe that governments should pay full course fees for students who want to study in universities. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Education
 plays a pivotal role in the development and progress of a country.
However
, owing to increased tuition fees, it is often debated who should cater to the higher
education
 expenditures of
students
 whether parents or it's state responsibility.
However
, I agree with the latter point of view with multiple arguments illustrated in
this
 essay.
Firstly
, the prime responsibility of the government is to provide its citizen with all the basic needs of life including health,
education
, justice, and so on.
Furthermore
, considering the economic instability all around the globe that has worsened the hardships of parents
as well as
students
 demand that the state must facilitate them, in terms of fulfilment of university fees.
In addition
, if
students
 are supposed to pay the expenses for higher
education
, they tend to work extra hours that will not only affect their
education
 but
also
 their health is put in danger.
Nevertheless
,
such
 initiatives from the government would
also
 encourage the rest of the population to pay focus on their studies, as the state would cater to their higher
education
 expenses.
Moreover
,
such
 a trend tends to promote more research and development work in the universities, as more and more
students
 are supposed to get enrolled which will
also
 enhance the positive and healthy competition amongst the potential candidates.
For instance
, owing to free higher
education
along with
 extensive research work, Germany has emerged as a strong EU economy. In a nutshell, considering the economic unrest all around the world, the gravity of the situation demands that countries must share the hardships of their citizen, more importantly, should allocate sufficient funds to meet the ever-growing expenditures for higher studies.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Higher education
  • University tuition
  • Public good
  • Economic growth
  • Fiscal responsibility
  • Merit-based scholarships
  • Need-based grants
  • Socioeconomic status
  • Educational equity
  • Income-contingent loans
  • Graduate tax
  • Financial aid
  • Student loans
  • Subsidize
  • Taxpayer funding
  • Underappreciation
  • Workforce development
  • Access to education
  • Higher learning institutions
  • Government expenditure
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