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The diagram illustrates various stages in the Aluminum recycle.

The diagram illustrates various stages in the Aluminum recycle.
The diagram illustrates various stages in Aluminum recycling.
Overall
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, there are seven stages in
this
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 cycle, starting with collecting the used cans and ending with reusing recycled can as the final products.
At the first stage
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 in the cycle, people throw away the used can into the trash bin
then
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 it gets collected by the garbage truck. In the next stage, they can be transferred to the factory for recycling, there, they are cleaned, sorted, and shredded before being compressed into small fragments. After that, the fragment is put in a melting pot for heating and melting down. At the following stage, the molten aluminium is rolled into a 2.5-6mm thick roll, the roll later is reformed into a new can with the standard of 74% recycled in the Uk. Recycling can be used by people, and the cycle will start again.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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