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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well sa practical problems.

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In today's world, a number of people try to emigrate to advanced countries in order to establish a better life for themselves. One of the most concerning issues for them might be that they have difficulty talking that foreign language, which can lead to various sorts of problems. I totally agree with
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 statement, and I will discuss some of the reasons for that. The first reason is that people can be underestimated and mocked by native speakers because of their deficiency in language skills. What I mean is, they might want to communicate with others;
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, because of their inadequate social skills and the fear of being derived, they would avoid forming relationships. A good illustration of
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 is, the social anxiety that they may suffer from in every social event. The second reason is a cultural shock which can occur for every person in a different country.
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, they are not familiar with the custom and traditions of that area, and
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 not having the ability to express themselves in an appropriate way can lead to many disturbing issues. Take cultural misunderstandings
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, when an individual is not settled down in a new atmosphere, they might behave or remark some inappropriate and sometimes offensive things that can irritate the locals.
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 can cause a great number of difficulties for both sides of the conflict. In conclusion, living in a foreign country in which you should struggle with its language can be troublesome, and at the same time, can result in diverse problems.
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