The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table describes the underground railway systems in six different cities. As can be seen from the graph, the ages of the subway systems tend to be proportional to the length of its
route
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number of passengers
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each year. London Underground, the oldest system, has the longest
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while
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the second oldest one, Paris Railway, has the highest figure for commuters on a yearly basis. In terms of the age of the railway system, London Underground was opened in 1863, recorded as the earliest one, followed by Paris and Tokyo.
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Angeles station was launched in 2001, which is the newest one among all the stations. Turning to the length of the
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, London
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records the longest
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with 394 km
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Kyoto, which was opened in 1981, has the lowest length with 11 km.
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a whopping 1191 million passengers
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Paris station every year, which is the largest number of travellers
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the figure for Kyoto's and Los Angeles 's passengers is 45 and 50 million per year,
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respectively
repectively
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respectively
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words route with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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