Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree?

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detrimental effect on both
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. It is
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fact that social networking sites are
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part of modern individuals’
lifestyle
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.Increased utilization and being easily accessible lead to
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negative effects of social
media
day by day.
Initially
,
people
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social
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of youngsters admit they are not able to imagine their life without social
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people
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Smidthman who is working at the executive office of WHO (World Health Organization) shows that youngsters
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do not
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use social
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rather than social
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • erosion
  • face-to-face
  • interactions
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • misinformation
  • polarize
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • procrastination
  • productivity
  • social isolation
  • dissemination
  • breeding ground
  • vast amounts
  • personal information
  • mental health
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