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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible. Others believe that some information is too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Introduction
Nowdays
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, We see many good or bad
information
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 from sns or
newspaper
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newspapers
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 or
televion
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television
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program
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programs
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.
Body · 1
Sharing
the
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apply
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information
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 is valuable for many
people
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 or Some
shared
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share
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 free
information
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 if It is too valuable .We discuss
about
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two different
view
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views
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.
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To begin
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 with , we can easily
cheak
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check
 about all
different
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the different
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information
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 from
utube
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youtube
 or
sns
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SNS
.
Body · 3
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those
thoes
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Those
 media provide
the
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apply
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information
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that is
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 free so many
people
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 have
benefit
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the benefit
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 of valuable
information
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from there.
Eventhought
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Even though
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,
pervery
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every
people
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 had
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a chanced
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chanced
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chance
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 to learn
valueable
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valuable
 skills .
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In
adance
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advance
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,
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person
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the person
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 who lives run-down area does not have money to register
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for privite
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privite shcool
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private school
 and living
expense
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expenses
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however
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, he had
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a chanced
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chanced
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chance
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 to have a
pupular
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popular
 skilled
teather
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teacher
 education class
though
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through
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utube
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youtube
 without any
paying
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pay
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.I
assuem
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assume
assumed
 that
this
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 is
positive
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a positive
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 way to share
informtion
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information
.
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On the other hand
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 , a
person
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 who
watch
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watches
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televion
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television
program
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choosen
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chosen
education
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an education
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program
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given
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is given
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 so good
knownlogy
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known logo
. so a
person
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 leant how to
choosing
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choose
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stuck
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a stuck
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 value with investment way and
than
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then
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 speaking to
thier
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their
 friends which
is
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are
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 so valuable
information
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 freely for a
person
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 who
interesting
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interested
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about
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in
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stucks
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stocks
 to
invasting
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investing
.
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however
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,however
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 It is turn out that the
program
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 did not have
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a basd
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basd
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base
to
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for
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the professal
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professal
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professional
 nation. some
people
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belive
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believe
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 that some
information
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 is
shard
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shared
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 if it is good.
Conclusion
in sum
up
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apply
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, I agree that
Information
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need
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needs
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 to
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be shared
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shared
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share
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for
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with
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many
people
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 ,
otherwise
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 , we
migh
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might
 not know
aboout
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about
 what is valuable
information
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 or not . It is not
usful
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useful
 a grand
information
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usless
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useless
unless
information
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is not need
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is not needed
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 to be free.

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