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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible. Others believe that some information is too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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, We see many good or bad
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newspaper
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newspapers
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 or
televion
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television
program
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programs
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. Sharing
the
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apply
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information
 is valuable for many
people
 or Some
shared
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share
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 free
information
 if It is too valuable .We discuss
about
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two different
view
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views
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.
To begin
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check
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different
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information
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youtube
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sns
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SNS
.
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those
thoes
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Those
 media provide
the
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information
that is
 free so many
people
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benefit
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 of valuable
information
 from there.
Eventhought
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Even though
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,
pervery
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every
people
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a chanced
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chanced
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chance
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 to learn
valueable
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valuable
 skills . In
adance
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advance
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,
person
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the person
a person
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 who lives run-down area does not have money to register
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for privite
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privite shcool
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private school
 and living
expense
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expenses
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however
, he had
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a chanced
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chanced
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chance
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 to have a
pupular
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popular
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teather
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teacher
 education class
though
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through
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utube
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youtube
 without any
paying
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.I
assuem
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assume
assumed
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this
 is
positive
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a positive
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 way to share
informtion
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information
.
On the other hand
 , a
person
 who
watch
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watches
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televion
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television
program
choosen
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chosen
education
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an education
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program
 which
given
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is given
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 so good
knownlogy
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known logo
. so a
person
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stuck
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a stuck
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 value with investment way and
than
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then
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thier
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their
 friends which
is
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are
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 so valuable
information
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person
 who
interesting
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interested
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about
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in
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stucks
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stocks
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invasting
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investing
.
however
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program
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a basd
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basd
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base
to
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for
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the professal
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professal
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professional
 nation. some
people
belive
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believe
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 that some
information
 is
shard
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shared
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 if it is good. in sum
up
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apply
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, I agree that
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need
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needs
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 to
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be shared
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shared
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share
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for
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with
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many
people
 ,
otherwise
 , we
migh
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might
 not know
aboout
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about
 what is valuable
information
 or not . It is not
usful
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useful
 a grand
information
usless
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useless
unless
information
is not need
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is not needed
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 to be free.
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