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Some people believe that free housing should be provided by the government for under-privileged and people who can’t afford to buy a house. To what extent do you agree and disagree with the statement? Give examples based on your own experience.

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As per Abraham Maslow's basic needs hierarchy, the
house
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 is a basic need of every human. The majority of
people
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 in third-world countries do not have a fixed monthly income and they couldn't afford to build a
house
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 of their own. I agree with
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 statement
due to
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 the fact that every one of us needs to say somewhere on
its
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our
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 own. Living in a third-world
country
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 is not
a
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 easy task. There are lots of economic crises, a lack of jobs, increasing consumer goods and poverty is higher than in developed countries,
consequently
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 building a
house
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 is a daydream for the majority of
people
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.
Moreover
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 that
people
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 live in flats or apartments
a
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on a
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rental basis even
their
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in their
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 lifetime. To make an ordinary
house
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 it costs around five million. some
people
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 suffer from high poverty and they can't even find money for their meals. So the best solution for
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 the
government
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 should supply places for some selected
people
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 after searching their income or their status. Some decades earlier there were some projects, that built some apartments, but these days all the projects are stepped down
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 the bankruptcy of the
country
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. the
government
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 collects taxes from
people
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 to develop the
country
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, but they do only a few things for housing problems.The
people
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 who live in small
houses
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 or flats face so many problems,
as
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such as
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 a lack of safety, and lack of privacy. The children who live in slums
,
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 are addicted to bad habits at small ages and after they become adults, society
fill
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 with useless
people
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.
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, if the
government
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 build a
house
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 for some
people
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, everyone expects them
also
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. It is the negative side I see. After that
people
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 lost their courage and they sit somewhere and wait till the
government
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 make
houses
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 for them. It is not a positive development and
people
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 may be lazy and the whole
country
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 becomes boring. To tackle
this
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 problem, select some specific committee and after the inspection of
this
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 cabinet, give them permission to build
houses
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.
To conclude
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, I believe that, housing is the basic need of every person, so it is the
government
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's duty to build
houses
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of
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for
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 certain
people
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.

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When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

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  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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