The diagram shows the recycling process of aluminium cans. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison when relevant.
The given diagram illustrates information about how
aluminium
cans
are recycled.
Overall
, the aluminium
cans
recycling process
consists of three main stages, namely : used and collected cans
, cleaned and compressed process
, and heated and reused process
.
To begin
,with consumers throw aluminium
cans
into rubbish bins. All cans
in the rubbish bin are collected by the janitor using the truck. After that, aluminium
cans
are sent to the recycling house (manufacturer).
Next step, the cans
passed the cleaned and sorted process
, and then
the aluminium
cans
were crushed in the shredding process
to remove any colour from the cans
.
Furthermore
, cans
are heated at a certain temperature to allow the aluminium
to melt. ,,
Next continue to roll Change the punctuation
apply
process
, of the aluminium
plate to a thickness between 2.5 mm and 6 mm. After getting the perfect size, aluminium
is ready to be recycled into new packages such
as drink containers for carbonated drinks. Finally
, the new cans
are ready to use in soft drink manufacture. In addition
, 74 per cent of aluminium
cans
in the united kingdom are recycled.Submitted by ieltscuns2022 on
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