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The chart shows requests for information at a tourist office in the United Kingdom from January to June.

The chart shows requests for information at a tourist office in the United Kingdom from January to June.
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The line graph
illustrats
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illustrates
 three different types of
requested
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requests
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 by visitors at a tourist
center
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centre
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 in the United Kingdom
thoroughout
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throughout
 January to Jun.
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, tourist
requsteings
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requesting
 by personal and phone were significantly increased
while
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 requests by letter and
emil
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email
 were decreased. Given
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january
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January
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, inquiries
from
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by
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 telephone were recorded
around
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at around
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 900, as in personal questions were
the
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 lowest point, nearly 400. To see
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 of phone went a
litle
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little
 bit down to 800, but it went upward to 1000 and maintained the same amount
requests
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of requests
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during
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from
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 March to April,
then
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 dramatically increased to 1600. From
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 graph,
in
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personal requests went
contiually
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continually
 up from around 400 to 1900. It showed the most changeable shape among
three
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 types of inquiring ways.
On
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the
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contrast
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to
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 other ways, to request by letter and email was only shown
decreased
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 shape. From February to March and May and Jun was the same proportion
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 the
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 month, but except
these
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 periods, it
towarded
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toward
 downwards. It was reduced from around 800 to under 400.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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