The Graph Below Shows The Proportion Of Four Different Materials That Were Recycled From 1982 To 2010.

The Graph Below Shows The Proportion Of Four Different Materials That Were Recycled From 1982 To 2010.
The line graph illustrates recycled materials
such
as
paper
and cardboard,
glass
containers
,
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aluminium
cans and
plastics
during the period, from 1982 to 2010
Overall
, four different reusable goods
were
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showed
finally
increased
per
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cent points than their initial points. In 1982, there were only two types of recycling things, respectively
paper
with cardboard and
glass
containers
. Compared to
two
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the two
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things,
paper
and
card board
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cardboard
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started at
the
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a
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higher point than
glass
containers
, it was around 15 per cent higher than
other
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others
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. From
in
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1986
and
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in
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to
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1990,
alumininium
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aluminium
cans and
plastics
were respectively begun to recycle. The
alumininium
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aluminium
and
plastics
were started at the lowest point among other recycled materials, they were between 0 to 10
percent
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per cent
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, but they were increased continually.
The
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Paper
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paper
and cardboard showed increased shapes from 1982 to 1986 and from 1990 to 1994.
However
, except
these
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for these
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periods, it continually decreased, but it
was
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occupied the
majorty
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majority
proportion of recycling throughout all periods.
Glass
containers
towarded
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toward
towards
downward, from 50
percent
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per cent
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to 40
percent
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per cent
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,
however
, it rebounded and peaked at 60 per cent.
Alumininium
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Aluminium
cans significantly went up,
started
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starting
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at 5 % and
then
ended
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ending
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up at 45%.
In addition
,
plastics
were
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steadily increased, but it always recorded between 0 to 10
percent
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per cent
show examples
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words paper, glass, containers, alumininium, plastics, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.

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