the audience of the male sports are more than the female sports what are the causes is it positive or a negative development.

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In today's world, both genders are equally active in every field whether it is a job or sports but, unfortunately, at some instant, society favours more

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men's sports rather than women's. I think

people

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enjoy more aggression in men during the

games

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and other

reason

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may

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dominate

girls

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and it is a negative development because

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are not getting proper recognition even after giving their full efforts.

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, everyone loves the

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when it has more action and enthusiasm during play because folks get entertained a lot with them.

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, the insane act of the player

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playing boosts the heat of the game and the audience finds more fun in it.

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, an IPL is the most popular tournament in India, and everyone supports their favourite team whether their team perform well or not but their love makes the makes more crucial.

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always

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girls

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are only for household

works

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if any girl

try

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to do

any thing

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job

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sport that male

dominate

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society does not allow her to show her capabilities

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, even try so hard in

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they don't get proper recognition of their work.

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, my friend who belongs to a middle-class family doesn't allow to play any game because of their parent's narrow-minded thinking even though she is very talented and skilful in

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. In conclusion,

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are changing with time, they give equal attention to both

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as compared to previous times, some places

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needalso

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need also

need proper awareness where

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are

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facing these problems even

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these days as well.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.5

Complete response

5.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

266 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

gender disparity
fan base
media representation
sponsorship deals
commercialization
stereotypes
athletic prowess
marketing strategies
visibility
cultural norms
gender inequality
grassroots initiatives
equal representation
institutional bias
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