The table shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

The table shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
The given table presents how many people visited Ashdown Museum throughout the
year
before and the
year
after it was refurbished. The pie charts display
visitors
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satisfaction level with their visit, during the same periods, which was identified through surveys. As seen in the table the
number
of visitors increased during the
year
after
refurbishment
. If during the
year
before
refurbishment
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,refurbishment
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number
of people who visited Ashdown Museum was 74000, so throughout the
year
after
refurbishment
these statistical data goes up to 92000. Comparing the given pie charts makes clear that the total
number
of visitors who
was
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very satisfied and satisfied increased during the
year
after
refurbishment
.
Whereas
the
number
of respondents who conclude that they were dissatisfied and very dissatisfied decreased. Only the
number
of people who didn’t answer
to
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this
question remained without changes.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • refurbishment
  • visitor statistics
  • satisfaction survey
  • seasonal trends
  • demographics
  • benchmarking
  • feedback mechanisms
  • amenities
  • exhibitions
  • customer experience
  • turnaround
  • user engagement
  • footfall
  • improvements
  • disparities
  • perception
  • enhancements
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