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The maps illustrate the Islip town center now and how it would be changed in the future.

The maps illustrate the Islip town center now and how it would be changed in the future.
The maps illustrate the Islip town
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center
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 now and how it would be changed in the future.
It is clear that
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 the big change to the town will be the construction of the ring
road
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 around the
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center
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. Some other developments with regard to
shops
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 and housing will accompany the building of
this
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road
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. The places in the south seem to stay unchanged. The school continues to be located at the same place - next to the housing and outside the carriage gate, but it will be expanded. The housing will remain nearly the same, with the new
road
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 near there. There is a big change in the
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center
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 of the town’s
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center
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centre
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 in
the
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apply
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plan. The rows of
shops
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 along the main
road
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 will be changed. The
shops
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 in the south will still remain. New housing will be built near the park, inside the carriageway, next to the old housing. The main
road
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 will be replaced by a pedestrian way. The
shops
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 in the North will be demolished, and
it
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 will be converted into an area for people’s daily activities, including
bus
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a bus
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 station, shopping
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center
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, carpark, and new housing.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words center, road, shops with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrate" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changed" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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