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More and more companies are allowing employees to work at home. Do you think this is a positive or negative impact?

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In the modern world, many businesses prefer their employees to
work
 remotely or anywhere.
In contrast
, many owners of
companies
 think
that is
 a very bad way to online. In
this
 essay, I will discuss the positive and negative affect on
people
 who
work
 online. First of all, many nations in ,Covid-19 there think that
work
 only can help many
people
 safe
for example
, in my country many
people
 must
work
 remotely because there need to take care of their safety and that others,and in
this
 ,way can help more than 50 per cent for safe and government always support them.
Secondly
, many
companies
 found that there can save money on electricity.
In addition
, many staffs there think that there can save money , and time on travelling, and there are very enjoyable working in their house ,and there can take care of their kids in the house which means they have more time for family.
On the other hand
, some
companies
, there think that working online is very negative because some
people
 must lose their energy ,and many staffs do not have communities.
Moreover
, many staffs think that there need to pay for expensive electricity.
To sum up
, I believe that working at home is very good for many
people
 because they will have more time for family and house and
companies
 can save money ,but sometimes there can get bored and do not have sociable. So, I think that
companies
 or staff can choose the style their like or there can
work
 in Hibird
for example
work
 from home for 3 days and
work
 in an office for 2 days.
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